Fundraising Donation Request Letters Must Tell Great Stories (Three Samples)

If your fundraising letter doesn't tell a great story,child . . .just a child. We pulled our Covenant House
it'snot a fundraising letter. It's a memo. Directvan up tothe curb and rolled down the window . . . ."
mailfundraising is all about storytelling.Or this opening story from an appeal letter mailed by
If you want your direct mail donors to respond toThe Cousteau Society:
yourletters in greater numbers and with larger gifts,"A shipwrecked sailor was struggling in the water.
learnthe craft of storytelling. Learn how toTheshore was near, but his strength was almost
writehuman-interest stories that inspire, motivatespent.
andmove your donors--to give.Then suddenly there was a friendly presence in
As a gospel preacher and one-timethewater, a strong, sleek body that buoyed him
universityinstructor, I've learned over the years thatup,escorted him to shallow water, saved his life.
thesafest way to make your point stick is to tellThisstory, or something akin to it, has been told
astory. As UK fundraising consultant Kencountlesstimes about dolphins and porpoises."
Burnettobserves in his book, The Zen ofOr this opening from an appeal letter mailed by the
Fundraising,fundraisers should tell stories because "weYWCA:
havesome of the best stories in the world and the"Shortly after the latest increase in heating oil, a
bestreasons of all for telling them."fuelcompany received an inquiry from the Mother
Jesus Christ revealed complicated truths aboutSuperiorof a Convent: "How much," she asked, "has
God'scharacter, God's prophetic plan for the ages,the priceof oil gone up? Wanting to break the news
andmoral absolutes by telling parables. The Prodigalgently, thesalesperson asked, "Are you sitting down,
Son. The Good Samaritan. Turn the other cheek.Sister?"
Gothe extra mile. These phrases are in commonReplied the nun, "I am kneeling." In its struggle
usetoday because the person who coined themtobecome energy efficient and cost conscious, the
2,000years ago told stories. Memorable stories.YWCA has initiated priorities to be achieved as
Stories thatreached the hearts of His hearers.fundsbecome available."
Your fundraising letters need to do the same. AndThe secret to crafting great fundraising letters is
thequickest way to a donor's heart is through thetocraft great stories. Whatever you are writing
adrenalglands. Consider, for example, thisabout,whether endangered whales, land mines,
openingparagraph from a fundraising letter mailed bycancersurvivors or abandoned cats, look for the
Covenant House:humandrama in your work that brings your message
"She stood on the curb looking scared and lonely inalive.
askimpy halter top and bright red lipstick. It was twoThen tell your donor a story. One with a
inthe morning. A chilly breeze whipped up in thehappyending.
streetand seemed to make her shiver. She was a